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Post by mysteryking on Dec 18, 2010 13:00:25 GMT -5
Wintry charms
Do gentle smiles harm.
Blushed lips turn pale
As is told the cold tale
And prior sensibilities fail.
Truth incomplete
Turns the mild and meek
Away from the friendly heat
So their strength the cold may defeat.
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Post by Magical Girl Lyrical Sarahnyan on Jan 3, 2011 23:46:17 GMT -5
I'm sorry nobody's posted on any of your writing yet - I'm getting on it, I promise. Is it okay for me to post on them, too? Just because some people might get annoyed, and if so I'll delete my posts. ^^
Okay, I had to read this a few times. Even if it's an exercise I'm going to attempt to discipher your deep meanings! I admit to you, I'm horrible on understanding poetry - I never got much experience with it, even though I tend to notice things some other people don't from my classes. Anyways, it took me a bit before I had a clear idea of what you might have meant. I'm probably completely wrong but I shall explain.
At first I thought you meant a couple was actually outside kissing in the snow (because of the "Blushed lips turn pale" line) but now I think it's a bit darker than that. Does it mean someone dies because of hypothermia in the snow? Because it sounds an awful like the person loses strength because of the snow's harsh freezing and turns lifeless.
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Post by mysteryking on Jan 11, 2011 21:28:21 GMT -5
Oh, I do so love it when people read my poetry and tell me what images my craft conjures. Indeed, far more than you can imagine.
Your idea is so much more amusing than what I wrote of, are you sure you'd have me ruin it for you?
And (obviously) I don't mind at all if you post on these. I'll quite enjoy it, actually. Thank you.
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Post by Magical Girl Lyrical Sarahnyan on Jan 11, 2011 22:10:05 GMT -5
You're welcome. Okay~ And I can totally relate. I love when people tell me about my writing, too.
Amusing? I take it that was nothing like what you were thinking, haha. Don't ruin then but I suppose it's okay to tell me if I was off about my assumptions. Though that pretty much just told me.
I wonder if anyone else has an idea of what going on. Poetry can be interpreted in so many ways.
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Post by mysteryking on Jan 11, 2011 22:16:37 GMT -5
I have long held that poetry has little to do with the poet once it is fully written. After that point, it is entirely about whoever reads it. My poem is about far different things between you and I because we are different people, obviously. It should be likewise with all poetry of even mild depth.
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Post by Magical Girl Lyrical Sarahnyan on Jan 15, 2011 23:20:27 GMT -5
Very true. That is a good way to look at it. Our interpretions are different because of our life experiences, so we find depth in new ways that the other could not. The person is writing the message from their mind but in a style that will also provoke thought for the other person's perceptions.
And to me, this just seems like a morbid piece. Someone else better agree. =b
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Post by mysteryking on Jan 16, 2011 16:17:41 GMT -5
Heh
Well, I have written pieces that have caused my friends to worry about my mental state. This however isn't one of them (as far as I know). The prose piece I posted here is much more indicative of that effect coming from me.
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Post by Elite on Jan 16, 2011 21:00:57 GMT -5
I read this more figuratively, as I do with most poetry. I saw it more as one of those stories where the innocent, nice person meets the cool, but emotionally distant guy and tries to hang with them.
"Wintry charms" makes me think of a loner-type person who 'everyone' perceives as 'cool'. Cold, but still charming.
"Do gentle smiles harm" is talking about who I believe is the protagonist, if you will, saying that the cool guy has had some negative effects on our once nice, shy (gentle smiles makes me think shy for whatever reason) protag.
The second stanza explains that the protag went from cheerful to cold and unfeeling.
And I feel the third stanza has the protag distancing themselves from others before getting to know them, and because protag is weak, they give in to the cold nature they've adapted?
I probably could've explained this better, but after rereading it a few times, more interpretations came to my head and I got confuzzled. xD; Though I must say, Sarah-nyan's theory is much more interesting. But I also want to know you had in mind when writing this just to see how off I am. xD
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